Writing Feedback Narrative

Learner: Irene, Samantha, Alesha and Amin                         Learning Coach: Mr Hattie          Date: 24 March 2016

Learning Area: Learning Habitat 1 - Literacy

Learning Observed

In Writing we have been looking at Moments in Time. This is a very interesting writing style as the learners have to pick a specific moment in an event that they will write about. It is quite hard to stick to a single moment, rather than recounting the event. The learners need to focus more on the details and sense. We have been looking at giving feedback and feed-forward to improve our writing. This is a task where the learners have to be Collaborative and focus on the helping improve their and their buddies Capabilities. The Irene, Samantha, Alesha and Amin are learning what the purpose of feedback is and the difference between useful feedback and surface feedback. Irene, Alesha and Samantha have been highlighting where they can improve on their writing. Since the learners have been using the feedback and feed-forward they have become more aware of their writing and the steps to improve it.  From the feedback given Amin has been circling where his writing can be improve based on the feedback.

Evidence of learning

Next Learning Steps

Irene, Samantha, Alesha and Amin’s next learning steps are: Adding similes to help describe an event. Show not tell to paint a picture in the reader's head.